Twilight and Pen

Alright, so first off tell me what you would most like to learn about. The "basic roleplaying" that I'm teaching is, obviously, basic things that have to do with Roleplaying. For details and post lengthening and other stuff like that, you might want a different teacher, but there are possibly some tips that I can give you that'll help. This is more a beginner level roleplaying, you'll have to develop and possibly join other classes to get it to an advance level. Punctuation is, well... punctuation. I think it explains itself, lol. So once you've told me what you wish to work on first (I'll teach both, but you can choose which) Write me an example of your role playing skills here that I can edit to show you what to improve on, etc, etc. Also, I won't teach both things if you don't want to, just tell me and it'll be done. ^^

Here would be alot for me:
Fade ran through the forest, with his mate nearby.His oldest pup, Sammy, was trying to keep up when he hit Fade like a rock because he stopped.He tried to push Fade, but he wouldn't budge."come on, Dad!" Sammy yelled still pushing.

as you can tell, I need better,advanced, and long posts.

with Mrs. Suka's teaching SO FAR, I got this:
The white wolf, being aware of the dangerous traps set by tan, tall, and tailless wolves carefully stalked the white hairball by the side of rabbit lake."come on now...aim well..." she kept telling herself.Doing her normal attack, she pounced the rabbit as it squealed bloody murder.It was barely able to touch the blue, clear water, but then it's heart stopped.Swift finished the meal at the cave before she bounded out in the woods, smelling each and every animal.She sat on a small, brown patch of packed down dirt.Swift glanced at a sitting owl on a tree.She threw her white muzzle up, and howled.

Alright, I'll use the last post you used, with the white wolf. It's good that your using the sencory words (like Suka said) but there is a better way of describing them, making it more interesting. Here's how I'd write that post:

The white female wolf called Swift carefully stalked the small white creature before her, being mindful of the traps set by the big, tan, and tailless wolves. The wolf felt more confident that the rabbit was beside the lake; it made escape harder for the animal. "Come on now... Aim well..." she murmured to herself. Preforming her usual attack, she leapt through the air to land on the squealing creature. It struggled in the wolf's grip before its life ended. Swift finished the meal quickly (I'm not sure where the cave come from in your post... did she carry it there?), and bounded away into the forest behind her with a full stomach. The scents of birds and small animals living in the undergrowth filled her nose, smelling wonderfully. She sat on a small, brown patch of packed brown dirt. Her ear swiveled (or twitched, there are anumber of words you can use) as an owl hooted in a nearby tree. She glanced up at it as she raised her muzzle to the sky, letting out a harmonious (again, a lot of words you can use) howl.

Words/scentences that are underlined:
Note the describing words I used? They make the post more interesting and visual. Make sure to include many of these words and phrases in your posts. You could, like me, memorize a few and just switch them around a bit. lol

Words/scentences that are bold:
These are optional, but you do need to add something there to keep the reader entertained. The part with the owl is good, but you really don't need it. It serves no real purose in your post. Now, if you wolf muttered something about it for a kind of... "comic relief" I guess would be the right word... Anyway, like that word "wonderful" that I put bold around; you could use any amount of words there and it would sum up just as well. At the beginning, where I bolded "Called Swift" and "female"; you don't have to include the words there, you could work them in later in the story/post. I like to add mine in later, but you can do whatever you like. ^^ This is your post, not mine.

So now write a new post using some tips I gave you. If you didn't understand something in those tips, tell me, lol, that's what I'm here for.